by Baby Rainbow
Submission date : 2007-03-21
Infinite Catastrophe aka Alisha ( F P C D )
This is a very deep, and very heartbreaking piece.
Those who commit suicide, I sometimes think are selfish. They think about their own pain before they think of what they will cause others. It's a horrible thing all round. Your friend must have been pretty depressed to have killed herself though. :(
Your emotions in this piece range from deep sorrow to pure anger and it was quite a piece to read. Probably one of the most emotional I have read, and I have read plenty of those. (Just one of your's recently).
Sorry you felt this way, hopefully you have forgiven your friend over time. It seems to me that you have chosen to feel anger towards your friend instead of sorrow, because it's easier to deal with that way. It truly is. But that anger won't last forever, and that sorrow will return... accepting it now and dealing with those emotions are the only way for you to get over your friend's death.. and even then, it will shape you as a person.
My only critique;
Punctuation... capitalisation is needed throughou the piece, and perhaps, I believe, a view commas/fullstops were out of place. I suppose that you were too emotional at the time to care. It's not that big a deal, just thought to point it out.
Well penned. 5/5
[ Praised by Baby Rainbow | Approved by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather ]
Meme ( F P C D )
I still come back and read this piece, its amazing that I keep feeling the same about it every time I come back and read it.
One of the deepest pieces ever!
Thank youbfor writing this. I it dealt has an impact on me cause I can relate. Thank you.