Submission date : 2009-02-07
Last edit : 2009-02-11
Marc Ortiz ( F P C D )
I think this was a perfect 'poem' to describe a 'friendship' love is genuine. I felt that you deeply care about your friend...
I like the way you used 'caesura' in most lines. (I dunno if that's the correct way of calling it)
- It gives more impact and meaning in the line.
Please love , dry your eyes (..)
There's no reason for you to cry (.)
You loved him lots ; I know it hurts (,)
But all these tears he's just not worth (.)
- The way used a 'space' before you put a punctuation is pretty cool because it's unique. I dunno if its your own style but I like it.
Just take our hand , and we'll help you heal ;
Showing you how true love feels .
- A perfect ending. This sums up the whole 'true love - friendship' bravo.
After reading this i now feel like shit lol. i cheated on the mother of my child. and didnt really think about how she felt. i just dont know how to live with myself. great write!!!! :( lol
Jyoti Rana ( F P C )
its one of the most true poem. every one should appliy same thing in his life.
I simply love this poem
Wow, one of the most beautiful poems I've read... Full of love..
Keep up the good work..
Awww I Like That I Wish I Can Make Something Like This Hold Up I Can <3 Lol