Vanessa ( F P C D )
at 2007-09-29
Now that was deep. I like the way you think. The flow was great, the vocab was wonderful, and the emtion was strong. Try rereading the poem out loud after not having read it for a couple pf days, it will help you spot places where the flow is off just a touch, other than that, there is no room for improvement. excellent job 5/5
id rathernot ( F P C D )
at 2007-09-29
I've so been down that street, and you expressed it so vividly, eloquent and smooth, a true joy to read...thanks
ICE f0rg0tTeNph0eNix ( F P C D )
at 2007-09-29
This is simple and says some little truth in it.. i like it the way it is, the ambiance were so peaceful and smooth great job! i can't actually find some flaws in here but just kindda confused.. who is the "best" you keep on repeating? is it a best friend or best companion such as bf/gf? well anyway, keep up the good work
X l i l T a n i X ( F P C D )
at 2007-09-30
I really like that poem it was very touching to me,, keep up the good work i hope to read some more soon :D
LivingDesolation ( F P C D )
at 2007-09-30
=^_^=
Very deep. A lot of emotion.
The flow of the poem was outstanding and I love it all.
Good Job.
[Vote 5]
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