becca ♥ ( F P C D )
at 2007-04-14
Wow.. this poem has a lot of emotion in it... the flow is good in most parts... the word choice was really beautiful, and i loved the ending... speectacular... :D
Kevin ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-08
Classic idea for a poem.
You might want to reign it in a bit though, try counting the syllables cause it feels like you didn't pay enough attention to the flow...perhaps read it out loud a few times.
Not saying it has to be perfectly rounded like a box, but at least a loose structure.
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