goran ( F P C D )
at 2006-09-20
The first two lines of the poem was enough to take me into the poem, very emotional and very greatly written, this poem dont deserve anything less than a 5/5
sweet lig ( F P C D )
at 2006-09-21
Great job.... your poem is great and also flow is really great thanks 5/5
Natalie ღ ( F P C D )
at 2006-09-23
Never thinking that one day you would be gone
[This line might work better if you replaced "thinking" with "thought".]
You know; The long walks on the beach through the sand
[The only thing I can sugest with this line, is to try and minimise the times you write "the"]
Overall, it was a pretty sad poem. The ending really summed it up, too and brought it all together. Nicely done.
Natalie``
Grumpy
at 2006-10-11
Third poem today that I read that gives a 5/5. I dont have many poems on here right now being a first timer and all. But would love for you to read mine when i have them up.
Grumpy aka Johnny
at 2007-01-04
I feel like im going insane!!! 5/5
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