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The Ghost of You ( F C D ) at 2006-03-10

Wow that is a really deep and thoughtfull poem, keep writing!!

L.S. Moore ( F P C D ) at 2006-03-14

Oh My God its a great poem 5/5. I do think you should fix the typos. Its great, Oh did I tell you its great. LOL....

Juls ( F P C D ) at 2006-03-19

Wow, thats intense. Great work I enjoyed reading it. The flow of this poem is great, it really got my attention. Sorry if this really happened to you.
Juls

Mona ( F P C D ) at 2006-03-19

God.. I really don't know what to say. It's such a sad poem. It's so emotional. I can really tell you gave this poem your all. So many feelings in this, so much pain.

It's very nice written. But I feel so bad when I say that, cause .. dam.. I'm sorry I don't know what to say..

Blah.. sorry.. speechless...

Glad you shared your feelings with us..

Lotsaaaaaaaa love
-xxx-

Kaylee Rose ( F P C D ) at 2006-04-07

It's really deep and emotional *and shows us how society has been going up and downhill* with fantastic organization. Some of the line sran a bit long but they still were alright. You might want to check some of your tenses. Other than that, it really is a sad poem that had my complete attention while reading it.

Italian Stallion ( F P C D ) at 2006-04-08

Wow, amazing Job. I loved it. This is a very emotional poem. great Job!

Latasha ( F P C D ) at 2006-04-08

Omg this is is so touching... it pretty much brung tears to my eyes.. and i know its a hard concept to over come!

Purple ( F P C D ) at 2006-04-08

Great poem, flowed, made more sense then must things I write. I want to yell at my brother for looking over my shoulder and reading Latasha's comment in a ioitic voice. This poem seems to demand greater respect. It tells a story, and well. It's good to hear of some ones servival through a horrible hell.

Fallen ( F C D ) at 2006-04-14

An excellent poem indeed. You have really brought the story of your past to life in this poem; making it atmospherically enjoyable- but emotionally heart breaking.Overall, great job.

Much love and God bless,
Fallen.

Kat ( F C ) at 2006-04-15

This is really deep. it flows all well together. its really sad but you captured it really well.

Kat

Marissa at 2006-04-19

WOW! Man that's so deep!! I'm so truly sorry if this really happened to you! I do agree with L.S. Moore though. You do need to work on those mistakes, but other than that, it's a great poem. Sad too!! Keep writing. I give you top ratings on this poem.

Take care cause I care!! You'll be in my prayers!!

Marissa

xXConfusedXx ( F P C D ) at 2006-04-22

Wow..I am left..Like SPEACHLESS..it was soo good..it brought tears to my eyes. Wonderful job..top rating defeniatly..

Đįşşოіńģ.·°¨´¨°· ( F P C D ) at 2006-04-23

Deep what other word can say it.. that is so strong.. you must have had it hard but it seems like you love your dad best of wishes!
-Rachel 5/5

Łøşŧ+Ħøpĕş+Ćŗĩmşøń ( F P C D ) at 2006-05-02

Great work again... really nice!

♥;;-Band-Aid-;;♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-06-01

That's really sad. A good poem though. Just really sad, I enjoyed it. Great Job.

*Wishes do come true* ( C D ) at 2006-08-27

Wow thats a powerful poem...but its real good but real sad...

LuvSuxGetDrunk ( F P C D ) at 2006-09-23

Really sad, but beautifully epressed, full of heartfelt emotion. Another 5/5

Live, Laugh, Love ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-01

Like the other you put tears in my eyes. I'm sorry your father was this way. He doesn't deserve to be a father. Keep your head up. Keep writing because sometimes that is the only thing that will help

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