Stephanie Michelle ( F C )
at 2010-02-07
"I looked into life's mirror and I saw you
A perfect reflection of me
Fitting together flawlessly
Inseparable were we
I didn't see life coming
I just saw a boy in black
I had no knowledge of what he had begun
Slowly my reflection changed
Bit by bit I lost you, the reflection in my mirror hazy
But I had hope"
I think the first two stanza's were a GREAT way to open your poem. They captured me almost immediately. Almost everyone has a poem about looking into a mirror (even i have one) so sometimes it gets pretty boring to read over the same idea again and again.. I think you did a fantastic job though!
Your use of imagery made it great for me to understand the self-struggle "you" were going through in this piece. I really liked the way you wrote this!
5/5
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