Karl Wild ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-06
This was pretty good but there were some noticable errors or things that could be changed to make it better. Second stanza third line you should remove "and" it messes up the flow and its not needed. Fourth stanza first line I had no idea what was trying to be said maybe it was a typo? Always check your stuff before you post it. Hopefully she enjoys this it should mean more to her haha I gave this a 4/5 nicely done
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