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Luna Blue ( F P C D ) at 2009-09-13

I liked the way this is story-telling written, and the idea of a cloud and an angel.
Your opening stanza was beautiful. It describes the surroundings in an elegant way. And it doesn't make the beginnging like popping in out of nowhere.
I also liked some of your word selections. Like "drowsily" and "magnificient". And each stanza describes in a beautiful way how the friendship is growing.
Though there are a few grammatical errors.
an angel sit's --> sits
awakening from it's --> its
It's smiles drowsily --> It
creature that hes --> he's

It doesn't hurt to the eye to read or anything, these are just tiny errors. But I was just mentioning.

Overall, I still liked this piece. Amazing how some simple words can relate to many others.

Keep writing,
Luna

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