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Blond Genius ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-29

Interesting
creative
unusual, which i love.
a few tips
a~ go with longer and more powerful stanza sections. it would impact the readers impersonal dealing and play their heart stings more deeply.
b~ dont use words as simple as so and (and) and for and was and all. make it strong change up the simplicity of friends and make it stand out.
but i loved it a lot!!!!!!!!

Lexie
play your talent with deceit, and it will heed.