Patrick Murphy ( F P C D )
at 2008-04-28
This poem was nice and short. Kinda short to tell you the truth. There were things i liked but truthfully most of the poem wasnt very appealing. It was good just not great! It was like a simple joyous tribute to somone you care about. It was still decent, i just didnt see many intense images or expierence any deep emotions. It was kinda like you just decided to sit down and describe somone.
Maybe instead of simply describing you could try to capture an instence when these descriptions come in place. Or maybe you can overexagerate everything to the point that people know your lying but they get the hint! Somtimes making somone seem more dramatic then they really are makes the poem and works more intense makes things more understandable. Because if you tell it how it is then everyone will ahve different meanings for your poetry instead of one simple meaning! Now ofcouse you want people to have different meanings but you still want your piece to explain what your piece explains!!!! And to grab and drive somone you have to trap them in your poetic charm!
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